Writing Workshop
We are working on drafts of our Personal Narratives! We have learned to zoom in and tell the most important details. We are revising our drafts to include strong leads and endings. We have examined how the use of dialogue, action, and writing descriptively to provide the reader with mental images improves our writing. Please share your story lead, ending or a memorable line from your story. What technique did you use? Give us a sneak peak and spark our interest to read your writing soon!
In class, we are studying how authors write many leads in order to find the best hook for their story. E.B. White tried out over seven different story leads when writing Charlotte's Web. He uses dialogue and a mental image in his strong lead. He finally chose:
ReplyDelete"Where's Papa going with that ax?" said Fern to her mother as they were
setting the table for breakfast. "Out to the hoghouse," replied Mrs.
Arable. "Some pigs were born last night."
In writers work shop i am writing about my bike ride in Colorado. it had felt like 6 or 7 hours but it was only 2 and it stared hailing on us.
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DeleteWhat happened? I want to read your book!
DeleteWow, Clay. I bike ride in hail! I can't wait to find out how you handled this situation!
DeleteI am writing a book about the time I drank expired milk. You will have to find out more by reading my book! Stay tuned.....
ReplyDeleteI am ready to read it! Really good summery.
DeleteI can't wait to read your book Hallie!!!!
DeleteI can already tell that it is going to be a great story Hallie :)
DeleteHallie, can you remember a line from your story? I know you wrote some wonderful details about that experience!
DeleteI am writing a book about the time I got to go to PLEASURE PEAR!And I am trying to make it really good find out more.
ReplyDeleteKay, can you remember your lead or ending? We can't wait to read more!
DeleteIn writers work shop I am writing about the time I crack my head open. And this is my ending sentence. I never thought a day with Mrs Thompson would end up with butterfly stiches.
ReplyDeleteGreat ending Mallory! You'll have to share your story with Mrs. Thompson when its published!
DeleteI am writing about the time I bought a game called Skylanders Spyro's Adventure.This is the starting sentence. Jerry! Scott said I know something better than Ninjago. What is I asked? Skylanders. And thats how it all started. Read more to find out what comes next.
ReplyDeleteI want to read your book Jerry.
DeleteYour book sounds really good because it has details.
DeleteJerry, using dialogue is a great way to hook the reader! We will work on adding " " quotation marks!
DeleteThat was really good jerry
DeleteI'm writing a book in writing workshop about the time I went to Shliterbahn and this is part of my lead.
ReplyDeleteOne morning I heard a Connor, Tyler, Madison get down here!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
That sounds like a good book.
DeleteI think you wrote a good book.
DeleteDialogue is an excellent way to hook the reader. We will work on adding quotation marks! :)
DeleteThat was exciting Connor that makes me want to read it
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ReplyDeleteI'll read your book.
DeleteBrandon, you set up your story with great suspense. I like how you included the sound you heard instead of just saying, "I heard a noise."
DeleteIn writers workshop I am writing about the time I saw a baby turtle.My favorite part is when I say ''it was THE CUTEST BABY TURTLE EVER''!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Stay tuned read more next time...your friend Avery:)
ReplyDeletei hope i get a chance to read it
DeleteAvery, we look forward to reading about the baby turtle!
DeleteI was bored, so I decided to go to the park. So I got on my bike and went. I did not know what to play when I got there, so I decided to wait. I did not know what I was waiting for, but I just felt like waiting. Read the book to find out what I was waiting for and if I find it!
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DeleteIn writers workshop I am writing a personal narrative about the time I went to a water park this is the lead sentence. When I woke up in our hotel in hot Arizona ''Dad" I
ReplyDeletesaid "can we go to the water park?" "Yes" he said. and the story continues.
Henry, you used dialogue to hook the reader! Excellent technique!
Deletemy story is about my cat he got lost and there was a cyote in town!!!!!but later we found him
ReplyDeleteEmma, I'm glad you found him! Can you remember a lead sentence or a favorite line from your story to share?
DeleteThat so scary but I glad you found your cat I can't wait to read more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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ReplyDeleteI'm writing a book about the time I got my dirtbike and this is the beginning. Vroom, vroom. One Christmas morning, I herd a noise. If you want to find out more, come read it.
ReplyDeleteAhhhh! I looked down. I screamed. I couldn't believe what had happened. My finger was trapped in the drawer.
ReplyDeleteMy strategy was to zoom in on the topic and to get in as many details as I could.
Thanks for explaining your strategy, Tristan!
DeleteI am working on zooming in on wone part and pooting in more details.My store is abuot win I cout two cat fish at one time.
ReplyDeleteWinston, you've definitely added some great details. Thanks for explaining your plan to us!
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ReplyDeleteIt was a sunny and awesome day when my family went to San Antonio.
ReplyDeleteMy strategy was to think of a moment and if I did not stop I could get it done.
In writers workshop we are writing personal narratives.I am trying to use acton words and dialogue.My ending is ''well we never ended up getting that turtle.But there is still a chance.Stay tuned and fined out more...
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For my personal narrative writing my beginning sintens is...It was a sunny day at disny land and I was about to go on pearadis pear. And I was trying to use action words.And you will half to find out what happens.
ReplyDeleteI am writing a personal narrative about the time I went to pleasure pear!I am trying to use more action words.This is my beginning of my story YAY WE ARE GOING TO PLEASURE PEAR!
ReplyDeleteFor my personal narrative I am writing about the time I cracked my head open. I am trying to add more details and dialogue. This is my ending sentince. I never thought a day with Mrs. Thompson would end up with hair not stiches.
ReplyDeleteI am writing a personal narrative about when I got my dog. my favorite sentence.. when I got in the living room I froze like an icicle. I am trying to use dialog words.
ReplyDeleteLove the mental image, Brooke!
DeleteIn writing work shop we are writing about a personal narrative my technique is zooming in little moments.This is my favorite part of the story.The ball hit a bump and bounced up and wam it hit me in the face.
ReplyDeleteExcellent, Devin!
DeleteI was bored, so I decided to go to the park. So I got on my bike and went. I did not know what to play when I got there, so I decided to wait. I did not know what I was waiting for, but I just felt like waiting. Read the book to find out what I was waiting for and if I find it!
ReplyDeleteMy strategy was I was trying to use lots of dialogue.
I'm writing a personal narrative and here is a preview "when are we going to go,"I asked. I am trying to focus on how I felt on a recent trip.
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